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The morning erupts
          on little cat feet
A flick of the tail
          a breath exhaled
               too fast at the end of a leap
and then

A paw,
     placed on lid's soft fan of lash
breath whirring, throaty, warm
          nose
             to
          nose

eyes still closed

Then          open

Thwack –
A stunning velvet attack
     innocent lids           unwarned
     warm sheets      no safe haven

The morning erupts
     on little cat feet.
A kitten, an early summer morning, a favorite poet. If you have a cat, you know this moment. If you love literature and modern poetry, you know the poem I'm referencing.
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Given 2011-12-01
Filled with fun rhythm, Morning - for Carl Sandburg is a great poem by *LlyrentheShrew. ( Featured by ikazon )
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katarthis Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I vaguely remember both of them... Lovely poem.

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JuliusScipio Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Student Writer
You know... I don't like Carl Sandburg at all. I was wandering and saw this first line and was reminded strangely of the lines in "Prufock" where the fog is described as being catlike. (Only, this is much more light hearted, obviously)

That being said- I loved this! It's so fun, it's like reading a smile. Awesomeawesomeawesome. :)
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Lovlyday Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
very much like fog by Carl Sandburg!!!! Love it :D plus... I like... I believe it is called operator or telophone operator by him as well :D
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Memnalar Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
:heart:
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machmaste Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Student Writer
Wow very awesome ]: )
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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elavoria Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is wonderful! I love the referenced poem, it's one of my favorites; this is a great tribute to Sandburg. The poem itself reminds me of a kitten with its whimsy, and the structure reflects the moment perfectly. <3

"Thwack -
A stunning velvet attack" <3
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BlueBoxDrifter Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
This totally reminds me of when my cat was a kitten. She attacked my eyes several times when I'd wake in the morning... or when I'd blink too close to her. lucky she has grown out of that fascination or I might be blind by now. haha! very nice!
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Aconitum-Napellus Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Professional Writer
Wonderful. A good cat poem is such a hard thing to write - well done on achieving the little flickers and snatches of a cat's movements.
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pixieplay Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
I love the pacing and internal rhymes! This is a wonderful tribute. :heart:
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Eriyonai Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
The cat in my lap approves.
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Student Writer
Lovely. Congratulations on your DD! I love the ending. So adorable! :heart:
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RequiemsandReveries Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011
nodding in approval, nice homage
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh do I ever know this moment. And you described it so perfectly! That morning mantra of "the cat's being cute, don't kill it." I'm not as familiar with Sandburg's poems as I am with his "Rootabaga Stories", but I still felt the sense of whimsy and magic, even in something that should be ordinary.
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ninjababy Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Love it; follow the pouncing kitten!
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WrittenRevolt Featured By Owner May 13, 2011
Hey, congratulations on being in $Moonbeam13's Pimps & Whoas! :clap: You've been featured in #theWrittenRevolution – check it out here. :heart:
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Solarune Featured By Owner May 12, 2011   Writer
Awww. :heart: That is such a perfect description of cats, I love the whimsical structure of the poem, too. It's a delight to read :)
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LlyrentheShrew Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2011
Many thanks!
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Solarune Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2011   Writer
You're welcome! :)
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wh0rem0ans Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011
Yes, we know. I am grateful for post-kittenhood.
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
full of energy and wanting attention...they are like spoiled little brats ;p
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Memnalar Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Little furry volcanoes. :heart:
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